Monday, December 21, 2009

The Air Under Desire's Wings

The Shadow on the Tree ~ John Ritchie

When he lay you down in a field of fallen feathers
While comets swam across the ballroom of your womb
You lay tongue-tangled in a myriad of possibilities

Colours collide with clouds beneath the arch of your closed eyes
Sending searching words reeling their meaning to find
Messages secreted between your world and his

When you cushioned him from the falling ground
And the circling wings unthinking threw no shadow
He gave no thought to future paths converging

In the ritual flight of meeting minds to nothingness
Each flower blooms to form an individual face
In the writhing of the cascading meadow

When you lift your eyes to touch the constellations
That swirl in the palette of his eye
He gives you the night, a filigree promise

But it is you
You who will need to lay claim to the morning


Yodood said...

my mouth wouldn't let my mind read this beautiful piece in silence, the experience of the words tumbling over the larynx and tongue was as the brook beside your meadow.

word verification: alecow - frat boy fantasy.

Justin Russell said...

Dazzling and intensely rich utterances as ever Pisces. It's a pleasure to read your work.
A superlative, sensational Saturnalia to you as well!

Tom said...

yeah, what he said. Super stuff.

the walking man said...

It is all summed up very nicely in the final two lines and delineates the difference between a hesitant and a wiling seduction. I liked this very much.

Trulyfool said...

Well-packed images. Power to it. And I liked the connection with the moralistic Victorian visual.

Pisces Iscariot said...

Yodood: The mental image of you reciting my poem aloud in the Texan wilderness brings a smile to my frostbitten face :D

Justin: Saturnalia? mmmm, interesting take on it :)

Tom: Fanx!

Walking man: I tried to illustrate the differing angles taken my men and woman (I notice the women have yet to comment ;])

Eric (SPAM) Johnson: Trust You??? You've got to be kidding!

Trulyfool: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed.

Harlequin said...

...he gives you the night, but it is you who must lay claim to the morning...
lovely line.... so much in there to ponder, as indeed there is in the whole of this piece... it feels strangely seductive

Pisces Iscariot said...

Harlequin: sorry for slow response - I guess that seduction is partly what this piece is abour :)

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